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posted: 9/14/2007 at 9:44 PM |
I am applying for a job at a new fitness club down near did's work (and Dane's school...I'm determined we will live down that way, again). The resume is the relatively easy part...here's my ROUGH cover letter. I'd appreicate any feedback:
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September 15, 2007
To Whom it May Concern:
The accompanying resumé is in response to your job listing in the Muskegon Chronicle for a Customer Service Representative. As my credentials show, I have previous experience in several positions that require considerable rapport with the public.
I am particularly interested in this position as it coordinates well with my personal interests. My related work experiences, combined with my enjoyment of physical fitness and ability to work with people of all ages and backgrounds would prepare me well to work with the public in a health club environment.
Since earning my second BA I have spent the past 6 years at home raising my son. In my spare time, I've enjoyed working independently as a candid portrait photographer and conducting in-home parties with The Body Shop at Home.
In the past few years I have lost 50 lbs and nearly 18 months ago I rediscovered running and have since trained for and competed in an average of 6 races per year in distances from 5k to 25k, with the goal of running a full marathon in 2008. In addition to running I also enjoy working out at home using free weights, so I am no stranger to the benefits of excercise for weight loss and overall physical fitness.
I'm confident that my academic and employment background, solid work ethic, enjoyment of regular exercise, and outgoing personality make me a well-rounded candidate for this position. I look forward to discussing your needs and my qualifications in more detail.
Thank you in advance for your consideration.
Sincerely,
Kirsten .....
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Kirsten
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• Run 1500 miles
• October 5 - 1st marathon - Milwaukee Lakefront - in my home state of WI
• PRs: 5k ~ 15k ~ 25k
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posted: 9/14/2007 at 9:50 PM |
Kirsten - having gone through cover letters recently myself ... This one is great!
I personally would leave the races out. It distracts a little bit from the other points. Maybe like that?
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In the past few years I have lost 50 lbs. Nearly 18 months ago I rediscovered running and have since trained for and competed in multiple races of various distances. In addition to running I also enjoy working out at home using free weights, so I am no stranger to the benefits of excercise for weight loss and overall physical fitness.
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Good luck with the application!! 
You would probably get a free or heavily discounted gym membership "on the side"  |
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posted: 9/14/2007 at 9:55 PM |
Quote from Runnergabe on 9/14/2007 at 9:50 PM:Good luck with the application!! You would probably get a free or heavily discounted gym membership "on the side"
Heh, I KNOW!!! Plus their staffed hours are generally 9-3, 5 days/week, so minimal nights, no weekends, no holidays...I don't care if it pays peanuts! That's just the thing to pay for my little running addiction! And I could take Dane to and from school (5 minutes from the club) most days, since he starts at 8:30 and is done at 3:30. How perfect! And it would be more incentive to move down that way, since did also works in that area. We would both be commuting 40 minutes to work.
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Kirsten
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.: 2008 Goals :.
• Run 1500 miles
• October 5 - 1st marathon - Milwaukee Lakefront - in my home state of WI
• PRs: 5k ~ 15k ~ 25k
• 1st trail race |
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posted: 9/14/2007 at 9:58 PM |
Nice job, K!
On the part about conducting in-home parties, is there a different way to describe this without using parties? I don't know what The Body Shop at Home is, but assume this involved some demonstration, marketing and/or sale of products...play this up.
Best of luck,
Lynn |
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posted: 9/14/2007 at 10:03 PM |
Quote from zoom-zoom on 9/14/2007 at 9:55 PM:Heh, I KNOW!!! Plus their staffed hours are generally 9-3, 5 days/week, so minimal nights, no weekends, no holidays...I don't care if it pays peanuts! That's just the thing to pay for my little running addiction! And I could take Dane to and from school (5 minutes from the club) most days, since he starts at 8:30 and is done at 3:30. How perfect! And it would be more incentive to move down that way, since did also works in that area. We would both be commuting 40 minutes to work. k
Free membership all the way (worked at a gym right before having twins.) Talk about an awesome Job Kirsten! Good luck and GREAT cover letter!
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Your toughness is made up of equal parts persistence and experience. You don't so much outrun your opponents as outlast and outsmart them, and the toughest opponent of all is the one inside your head." - Joe Henderson
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posted: 9/14/2007 at 10:07 PM |
| Quote from jlynnbob on 9/14/2007 at 9:58 PM: Nice job, K!
On the part about conducting in-home parties, is there a different way to describe this without using parties? I don't know what The Body Shop at Home is, but assume this involved some demonstration, marketing and/or sale of products...play this up.
Best of luck,
Lynn
Well the resume describes what my job responsibilities were, so I don't want to get too redundant (BTW, TBS is the store in the mall with all the amazing smelling lotions--like Bath & Body Works, only no animal testing involved and way less headache-inducing scents).
Pam, it does sound perfect. I hope the fact I live 40 minutes away isn't an issue for them.
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Kirsten
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.: 2008 Goals :.
• Run 1500 miles
• October 5 - 1st marathon - Milwaukee Lakefront - in my home state of WI
• PRs: 5k ~ 15k ~ 25k
• 1st trail race |
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posted: 9/14/2007 at 10:11 PM |
| Quote from zoom-zoom on 9/14/2007 at 10:07 PM: I hope the fact I live 40 minutes away isn't an issue for them.
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Sounds great! I don't know why the distance would matter as long as you didn't have a problem getting there on time.
Good luck
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posted: 9/14/2007 at 10:12 PM |
| Quote from zoom-zoom on 9/14/2007 at 10:07 PM: Well the resume describes what my job responsibilities were, so I don't want to get too redundant (BTW, TBS is the store in the mall with all the amazing smelling lotions--like Bath & Body Works, only no animal testing involved and way less headache-inducing scents).
Pam, it does sound perfect. I hope the fact I live 40 minutes away isn't an issue for them.
k
I can't imagine it will.Definetly sounds like the perfect job! Hey maybe you could work your way up into being a Personal Trainer! Ya never know
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posted: 9/14/2007 at 10:14 PM |
Nice siggy  |
Life is not measured by the number of breaths we take, but by the number of moments that take our breath away...(unkown)
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posted: 9/14/2007 at 10:15 PM
modified: 9/14/2007 at 10:29 PM |
Quote from Chenille on 9/14/2007 at 10:14 PM:Nice siggy
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Your toughness is made up of equal parts persistence and experience. You don't so much outrun your opponents as outlast and outsmart them, and the toughest opponent of all is the one inside your head." - Joe Henderson
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posted: 9/14/2007 at 10:31 PM |
Quote from rockenmamof5 on 9/14/2007 at 10:12 PM:I can't imagine it will.Definetly sounds like the perfect job! Hey maybe you could work your way up into being a Personal Trainer! Ya never know
The funny thing is a couple of months back I was doing a little research into what it would take to get certified to do that--I think I come from a unique perspective as a 30-something mom who has been obese and still battles chub. If I were to get that job and really enjoy it, then that's something I would likely look into further.
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Kirsten
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.: 2008 Goals :.
• Run 1500 miles
• October 5 - 1st marathon - Milwaukee Lakefront - in my home state of WI
• PRs: 5k ~ 15k ~ 25k
• 1st trail race |
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posted: 9/14/2007 at 10:35 PM |
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a vagabond,..highway-beater; a rolling stone, one that does nought but runne here and there.
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posted: 9/14/2007 at 10:37 PM |
Quote from Jeff on 9/14/2007 at 10:35 PM:Did you put RA mother-hen on your resume?
No, but I should...and I could even promote RA on the job--woot!
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Kirsten
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.: 2008 Goals :.
• Run 1500 miles
• October 5 - 1st marathon - Milwaukee Lakefront - in my home state of WI
• PRs: 5k ~ 15k ~ 25k
• 1st trail race |
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posted: 9/14/2007 at 10:39 PM
modified: 9/14/2007 at 10:42 PM |
| Maybe Eric could write you a rec--what would this site be without zoomers? |
a vagabond,..highway-beater; a rolling stone, one that does nought but runne here and there.
~Cotgrave, Randle A dictionarie of the French and English tongues, 1611
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posted: 9/14/2007 at 10:49 PM |
| Quote from Jeff on 9/14/2007 at 10:39 PM: Maybe Eric could write you a rec--what would this site be without zoomers?
Ooh...that would be a funny rec. For someone he's never met IRL. For all he knows I could be a 480# man named Hank!
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Kirsten
• Ladies Locker Room •
.: 2008 Goals :.
• Run 1500 miles
• October 5 - 1st marathon - Milwaukee Lakefront - in my home state of WI
• PRs: 5k ~ 15k ~ 25k
• 1st trail race |
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